Tuesday, November 18, 2014

College essay

Mark Hwang
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9/29/14
College
        After college graduates have faced unemployment. People began to worry if college was worth the money or not. This problem has some people to question what they value about higher education. People began to worry if college was worth the money. Most high school students are pressured into attending college by either their parents or school. For me, I dont think its worth the cost. There are many reasons why people should not go to college because these sources convey multiple reasons why it is not.
                Going to college is not a bad thing but it is not required. Actually going to college can be a great experience for anyone and can help benefit your career. Crawford from Source A states, “Some people are hustled off to coln inclinations and natural bents…” He is stating the fact that there are students who don’t have the money to pay for college. Although the students must learn, college is not the only option out there.
       In source C, it shows a group titled “New College Graduates Losing Ground on Wages Starting from 1979 to now, the hourly wages increased and decreased throughout the years. This is basically showing how colleges can be fun, but it cants manage finance conflicts. But the chart on source C indicates that the hourly wage for students with no advanced degree has been rising. Some students were even paid money to not attend college.
             Theil was actually one of those people who thought colleges were often more beneficial. However after his success, he realized colleges weren’t the only option. Theil was convinced that social pressure led to innovations in the future. I believe Thiel changed his mind because he realized that colleges are just one of the factors that lead to success.
        There are many college graduates often in unemployment. This proves that colleges can be unhelpful .More and more college graduates are in unemployment. If it is up to the point where students are paid to not go to college, it already decides that college is not the only option in this. Despite the better education, college is not worth its cost.


1 comment:

  1. Introduction adequately explains the background of the problem, but essay lacks detail. Thesis states the problem but could be a bit longer to get your position on the issue without including the word "I". Never use the word "I" when stating your side of the argument. Make sure to use at least 3 sources and use enough quotes to analyze and prove your point.
    -Miriam Antonio

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